Decide the story you want to tell

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Finally something somewhat interesting that

There are many types of intelligence. Of course you need compelling photos, but those who are looking for a real relationship will look beyond a pretty face to find out what you are about.

Play around with a few headlines before you decide on the final one. Another issue with playing it safe and trying to cast a wide net is that you force the girl to switch her screening process over to depend more heavily on superficial things like looks, height etc.

Never stand still fluffing it along. Check your spelling and grammar.

You also seem

You also seem to be implying that if a guy is a serial killer or a bank robber that he is going to list it in his profile. Finally something somewhat interesting that she says about herself. It almost sounds like a poem. Another common pitfall is sarcasm in the profile. The right people are going to think that's awesome.

This will help you come across as sincere and genuine. Again thank you for your advice.

Don't use the crutch of describing your job and moving on. Not only do you come across as negative, but you also give the impression that you are the very thing you claim not to want. Your profile tells a story.